1. Barbara
    Barbara June 30, 2014 at 4:35 pm .

    Yes, I remember the second one well. And just so your readers know, James Dewar was particularly impressed with the line – “I became my father. I wore his face.” I saw James mulling it over wondering how he could use it in one of his own poems! Just kidding, James, if you are reading this! Hadn’t heard the first poem before now, but you know I enjoy your poetry, edited or not.

  2. Sue Reynolds
    Sue Reynolds June 30, 2014 at 9:12 pm .

    Hi Viga, Love them both in their raw form. They are both definitely worth editing and submitting. I agree that the lines about wearing the father’s face are particularly strong, and I also found the last line in the first poem “Her bullets are the ink in my pen” just fabulous.

    Also love the salty butter on the toast becoming even saltier!


  3. Marilyne Rudy
    Marilyne Rudy July 1, 2014 at 1:23 pm .

    Hey Viga,
    They are excellent for being in the raw and only 10 minutes to do them. I would have had to think about what I was going to write for at least 5 minutes & then would never have finished writing in the allotted time. For your English teacher to say what she said; she knew that you had it in you to do better! I loved the analogy of using the bullets & wearing your father’s face! Definitely worth editing and adding to your collection. Somewhere, along the line when the opportunity arises, I would submit it. Hurah for the raw! LOL

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